Is it catchy?

[Gooooogler]

Yes cat i agree if its a contructive criticism you should accept it. Thats the only way to improve.. just a sugestion. It also depends suggestions is comming from whom and its a honest suggestion or not..

[Aírmanareiks Þiudareiks]

Yeah that is true, because you know, there is a certain someone whose reviews I'd never even give a damn about because they're never honest, too biased and always negative, no matter what, and the reasons cited make no sense, so it is just a waste of time. And no, it isn't anyone from this thread, Cat knows who it is, and maybe Gooooogler.

[mondine]

Criticism in creative writing is limited in its benefits, anyway.
Usually, the critic would have done something in a different way, which ends up being
a different story that the critic should have written to suit themselves.

How do you like my apple?
You should have had an orange, because I like oranges.

[IamTheKing9]

Actually, I can see what you would call a "silly mistake". Cat has just missed thre letters of a word.

[mondine]

Originally Posted by IamTheKing9

Actually, I can see what you would call a "silly mistake". Cat has just missed thre letters of a word.

Ah, but that's the beauty of telling a story in the 'first person'. There are no mistakes.
That is just the way that the character speaks (and spells).

[IamTheKing9]

Originally Posted by mondine

Ah, but that's the beauty of telling a story in the 'first person'. There are no mistakes.
That is just the way that the character speaks (and spells).

OK. Read the seecond line of the second paragraph and notify me if you find some kind of mistake in there.

[mondine]

Originally Posted by IamTheKing9

OK. Read the seecond line of the second paragraph and notify me if you find some kind of mistake in there.

There are... English irregularities in a number of places. But this is the character's voice, not the author's. This is what 'writing in the first person' means.
You can't tell a fictional character that they are in error. Or you could,
if you're the type that shouts at the screen in movie theatres, or argues with the television.

[Aírmanareiks Þiudareiks]

Yeah, it's kinda like arguing with people because they pronounce "forte" as /fort UH/ or /fort EH/ instead of the correct pronunciation /fort/, since it came from plain French 'fort' which means strong. You can't really blame people when words sharing identical orthography with different meanings have conflicting pronunciations. The /fort UH/ pronunciation was influenced by Italian 'forte', which is pronounced that way and was similarly borrowed into English, and is a musical term.

[IamTheKing9]

One question (maybe the last) - what mistake did you find?

[mondine]

Originally Posted by IamTheKing9

One question (maybe the last) - what mistake did you find?

The writer specifically mentioned not wanting to hear about it. I choose to respect her wishes.